Summer Blog #2 - Poem.

Published by RI_RS on 15 July, 2012 - 02:37

If only you knew, 

the things I went through, 

the first side of June. 

 

If only you saw, 

my good luck withdraw 

that night I met you 

 

If only you'd been 

the one that had seen 

my hope crush and die

by the end of July 

 

If only you focussed 

you'd know by mid-August

That next June would be without you. 

 

 

Comments

Submitted by Foysol89 on 15 July, 2012 - 02:48

Read it like 3 times, still not sure what it's about,  not sure i'm meant to understand what it's about. For a second i thought it had something to do with Ramadhan but read it again  and thought nah. 

Saying that i still like it. 

Not gonna ruin it with my thoughts anymore. 

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Lets reunite the ummah under one flag LA ILAHA IL ALLAH MUHAMMADUR RASULULLAH

Submitted by s.b.f on 15 July, 2012 - 02:51

I think she's talking about her results Smile

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Submitted by RI_RS on 15 July, 2012 - 02:53

Foysol89 wrote:

Read it like 3 times, still not sure what it's about,  not sure i'm meant to understand what it's about. For a second i thought it had something to do with Ramadhan but read it again  and thought nah. 

Saying that i still like it. 

Not gonna ruin it with my thoughts anymore. 

LOL 

Firstly, thanks for reading it Biggrin 

B. You're thinking too hard, its one of those poems that are extremely simple. Try again, but with a dumb brain. 

3) Its nothing to do with Ramadan. Read it with that frame of mind where you've had to cut someone out of your life because they're doing more harm than good. And if you don't know how to, then Alhamdulillah. :] 

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by RI_RS on 15 July, 2012 - 02:54

s.b.f wrote:

I think she's talking about her results Smile

 

LOL, thats clever! 

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by Foysol89 on 15 July, 2012 - 02:59

Oh that was the initial thought. Lol 

i think most people have been through this, different situations and circumstances. I can relate. 

Your last blog had me thinking too deep, lol

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Lets reunite the ummah under one flag LA ILAHA IL ALLAH MUHAMMADUR RASULULLAH

Submitted by Seraphim on 15 July, 2012 - 13:04

These are very good.

Alot like a haiku.

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Back in BLACK

Submitted by RI_RS on 15 July, 2012 - 13:49

Seraphim wrote:

These are very good.

Alot like a haiku.

Thank you! Smile 

Have you written any poetry lately?

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by RI_RS on 15 July, 2012 - 13:58

Titanium wrote:

Sweet but it RHYMES.

Haha is that a problem?

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by LookingToSee on 15 July, 2012 - 20:53

i like it. i like the rhyme. its just right. rhyming is quite an interesting thing...it makes what could be prose into verses... it gives a certain feelings to words no?

 

and LOOK! LUCK!!

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Is it true? Is it kind? Is it necessary?

Submitted by RI_RS on 16 July, 2012 - 02:35

Titanium wrote:

Yeah. Everyone rhymes when they write a poem...

 

It's still very sweet.

Thanks Sidanium ;] 

I don't always actually, cos its easier not to rhyme. When you do its kinda more forced cos you have to write within the limits of the last word rhyming with the sentence before, y'know? But this is just a short little thing, I'll try not to next time Wink

 

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by RI_RS on 16 July, 2012 - 02:36

Lilly wrote:

i like it. i like the rhyme. its just right. rhyming is quite an interesting thing...it makes what could be prose into verses... it gives a certain feelings to words no?

 

and LOOK! LUCK!!

 

Thanks Smile 

Haha yeah, I thought of the luck thing when I was writing it, but everything else just seemed too strong. 

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by Hummus on 16 July, 2012 - 11:57

Short, sweet, simple, yet soo powerful! I like this poem!

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Submitted by RI_RS on 16 July, 2012 - 13:22

Hummus wrote:

Short, sweet, simple, yet soo powerful! I like this poem!

Why senk you :] 

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by Hummus on 16 July, 2012 - 13:37

I like it because it's straight from the heart. You've said what you need to, without giving too much away! Writing poems is something that i'm not fond of, i wish i had this ability!

At first, i thought it was about a particular person. I read it again, and thought it could be about revsising and sitting exams (rather than results) because you had used specific months. But, I'm going to stick with my initial interpretation.

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Submitted by RI_RS on 16 July, 2012 - 15:46

Hummus wrote:

I like it because it's straight from the heart. You've said what you need to, without giving too much away! Writing poems is something that i'm not fond of, i wish i had this ability!

At first, i thought it was about a particular person. I read it again, and thought it could be about revsising and sitting exams (rather than results) because you had used specific months. But, I'm going to stick with my initial interpretation.

Thanks! I'm not much of a poet either, I just occasionally get inspired. You can do it if you try not to think too hard and just let it come to you.

Haha yeah the fact that june-august is exam period is just an unfortunate co-incidence Blum 3 

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #

Submitted by Hummus on 16 July, 2012 - 16:02

In my head, i think way too much (sometimes even when i don't need to) and everything just has to have a touch of perfection, so once i get that out of my head, i think i should be able to put pen to paper.

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Submitted by RI_RS on 17 July, 2012 - 00:18

Hummus wrote:

In my head, i think way too much (sometimes even when i don't need to) and everything just has to have a touch of perfection, so once i get that out of my head, i think i should be able to put pen to paper.

Or maybe you should write about that? 

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#Before you look at the thorns of the rose , look at it's beauty. Before you complain about the heat of the sun , enjoy it's light. Before you complain about the blackness of the night, think of it's peace and quiet... #