Summer Blog #2 - Poem.

RI_RS —

If only you knew, 

the things I went through, 

the first side of June. 

 

If only you saw, 

my good luck withdraw 

that night I met you 

 

If only you'd been 

the one that had seen 

my hope crush and die

by the end of July 

 

If only you focussed 

you'd know by mid-August

That next June would be without you. 

 

 

Foysol89 — Sun, 15 Jul 2012 - 02:48

Read it like 3 times, still not sure what it's about,  not sure i'm meant to understand what it's about. For a second i thought it had something to do with Ramadhan but read it again  and thought nah. 

Saying that i still like it. 

Not gonna ruin it with my thoughts anymore. 

RI_RS — Sun, 15 Jul 2012 - 02:53

[quote=Foysol89]

Read it like 3 times, still not sure what it's about,  not sure i'm meant to understand what it's about. For a second i thought it had something to do with Ramadhan but read it again  and thought nah. 

Saying that i still like it. 

Not gonna ruin it with my thoughts anymore. 

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LOL 

Firstly, thanks for reading it 😃 

B. You're thinking too hard, its one of those poems that are extremely simple. Try again, but with a dumb brain. 

3) Its nothing to do with Ramadan. Read it with that frame of mind where you've had to cut someone out of your life because they're doing more harm than good. And if you don't know how to, then Alhamdulillah. :] 

Foysol89 — Sun, 15 Jul 2012 - 02:59

Oh that was the initial thought. Lol 

i think most people have been through this, different situations and circumstances. I can relate. 

Your last blog had me thinking too deep, lol

RI_RS — Sun, 15 Jul 2012 - 13:49

[quote=Seraphim]

These are very good.





Alot like a haiku.

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Thank you! 🙂 

Have you written any poetry lately?

LookingToSee — Sun, 15 Jul 2012 - 20:53

i like it. i like the rhyme. its just right. rhyming is quite an interesting thing...it makes what could be prose into verses... it gives a certain feelings to words no?

 

and LOOK! LUCK!!

RI_RS — Mon, 16 Jul 2012 - 02:35

[quote=Titanium]

Yeah. Everyone rhymes when they write a poem...

 

It's still very sweet.

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Thanks Sidanium ;] 

I don't always actually, cos its easier not to rhyme. When you do its kinda more forced cos you have to write within the limits of the last word rhyming with the sentence before, y'know? But this is just a short little thing, I'll try not to next time 😉

 

RI_RS — Mon, 16 Jul 2012 - 02:36

[quote=Lilly]

i like it. i like the rhyme. its just right. rhyming is quite an interesting thing...it makes what could be prose into verses... it gives a certain feelings to words no?

 

and LOOK! LUCK!!

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Thanks 🙂 

Haha yeah, I thought of the luck thing when I was writing it, but everything else just seemed too strong. 

RI_RS — Mon, 16 Jul 2012 - 13:22

[quote=Hummus]

Short, sweet, simple, yet soo powerful! I like this poem!

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Why senk you :] 

Hummus — Mon, 16 Jul 2012 - 13:37

I like it because it's straight from the heart. You've said what you need to, without giving too much away! Writing poems is something that i'm not fond of, i wish i had this ability!

At first, i thought it was about a particular person. I read it again, and thought it could be about revsising and sitting exams (rather than results) because you had used specific months. But, I'm going to stick with my initial interpretation.

RI_RS — Mon, 16 Jul 2012 - 15:46

[quote=Hummus]

I like it because it's straight from the heart. You've said what you need to, without giving too much away! Writing poems is something that i'm not fond of, i wish i had this ability!

At first, i thought it was about a particular person. I read it again, and thought it could be about revsising and sitting exams (rather than results) because you had used specific months. But, I'm going to stick with my initial interpretation.

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Thanks! I'm not much of a poet either, I just occasionally get inspired. You can do it if you try not to think too hard and just let it come to you.

Haha yeah the fact that june-august is exam period is just an unfortunate co-incidence :p 

Hummus — Mon, 16 Jul 2012 - 16:02

In my head, i think way too much (sometimes even when i don't need to) and everything just has to have a touch of perfection, so once i get that out of my head, i think i should be able to put pen to paper.

RI_RS — Tue, 17 Jul 2012 - 00:18

[quote=Hummus]

In my head, i think way too much (sometimes even when i don't need to) and everything just has to have a touch of perfection, so once i get that out of my head, i think i should be able to put pen to paper.

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Or maybe you should write about that?